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stevestory (User has a profileUser is a Pro MusicianUser is a Gold member15)
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Posted: Wed 01 Oct 2008 19:16

Ok, I sat down and had a better go at this song of mine. A few tweaks here and there, a few extra bits and bobs.

All feedback appreciated


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Posted: Thu 02 Oct 2008 9:00

loved it
I love it in my Valley........................baaa baaa



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Posted: Thu 02 Oct 2008 10:20

Thanks Sonya
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Posted: Thu 02 Oct 2008 10:52

much better stevo, stronger mix and backing vocs are grand. Most importantly though for me is the songwriting, you choose some excellent lyrical subjects and verse them like a pro. Have a look at the chrysallis music publishing website and send in your demo,

http://www.uk.chrysalismusic.co.uk/core/what_we_do.cfm


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Posted: Thu 02 Oct 2008 15:12

Thanks mate. I really appreciate your comments about the lyrics and songwriting.

No harm in having a look, cheers
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Posted: Thu 02 Oct 2008 22:01

yep, much better, those bvocs are great too, good song structure - i wanted it to go on for longer, which usually means it's a good length! still loving those soulful vocs.


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Posted: Fri 03 Oct 2008 9:50

Yep - good one, Stevey Babes.

Now, I'm not in any position to talk to anybody about singing; however, I think that in general, your vocals (even though they are good) have a bit of an 'uptight' tone, which could just do with relaxing out and making more sonorous (if at all possible) - particularly when considering the style of music you produce. I mean, you're almost there - but it's just that edge that needs taking off, *imo. I hope I don't offend or upset you in saying this - it's not mi intention to do that.

The song itself reveals a songwriter of sensitivity and talent.

And good luck with your gigs and stuff!

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